Very good!
So this brings the military charactor count up to.....2, can't wait for the next part!
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Does it really? Just because someone wears military pants does not mean they are military.
awsome story and finally a not scary pic.
Glad yer liking the story. And I have plenty of not scary pictures.
You said Military issued, when describing his pants. now i don't know about Canada, but here in America, you can Camo pants, but they aren't at all like the military issue ones.
Army surplus stores my friend. It can't be that hard to get military issued pants. However, I also didn't say he wasn't military. I also didn't say what era the pants were from. There's lots I've purposely left out about John in so far.
Human/ Zombie hybrid............okay i just had a bad thought about a zombie knocking some girl up........ewww
That would cause infection in the woman. Bodily fluids are being transmitted from one to another. At least, that's what it would do in my story.
if your going to keep me posted with this seris at least comment about my post
my apologies. You can say you don't want to be kept posted about the series if you wish. Seeing that you don't seem to interested in it anymore, I shall refrain from keeping you informed.
That was quick, slightly better picture ;o
I said the picture is slightly better ;o
I notice your writing has a lot of dialogue.
Is it ok to start an entirely random conversation?
Uh... I suppose. Why?
Cause I have nothing better to do!
So I see.
Introductions tend not to be heavy in dialogue, I know.
I'm sorry for my high expectations -.-
Still, you describe in detail quite well.
Very interesting installment. Character development is stacking, and engagements are being formed. It shows promise.
I'm beginning to like John, as a character, and as a portal into the minds of zombies. Most zombie movies portray zombies as almost unconscious, and don't explain how if a zombie are just walking bags of mumbling flesh, how they understand their surroundings. Zombies having instincts, however, is a very logical reason. It is very enticing.
I'm liking Joey less and less. It seems like you are trying to make him look like a jackass, which is fine, seeing as all balanced stories have mean and nice characters, but I have another reason for hating him. I can't stand the way he talks. He sounds like a mixture of some Sci-Fi geek and a fourth-grader. It sounds like he doesn't get that he is in a zombie-vampire apocalypse, fighting for his life. Maybe he is supposed to talk like that, but if that's the case, you are doing a good job of it.
I can't wait for the next installment. Hope it comes soon. Bye!
John is an interesting character for me to write. I know where I'm going with him and what is in his little future. Hopefully the reaction to his revelations are taken well.
Joey is written like a sci-fi nerd. My original introduction of him had him sitting back on his couch watching TV. I cut that out to have a much more interesting Part 2 to introduce the situation on the island.
Next installment coming soon.
is it just me, or is Jay liking Haley a bit?
Perhaps he is.
My original complaint is once again brought to light. Slacker013: "Is it okay to start an entirely random conversation?" C'mon now, you could have said many more useful things. Like: Your writing is really good, once again. These encounters and dialogues you have feel stunningly real and human (with an exception to Haley :) Or: This is great! You are one of the top five reasons there should be an Writer's Portal. Perhaps even: Excellent job! I can't wait for another! Just how is it you make such a false story feel so real? Ah well. I can't educate everyone. It's not my job. But I do mean what I wrote sinfulwolf. And Slacker, I hope you took notes on this. Till the next thrilling installment:
Haunted by the image you uploaded for this one,
DarkX.
Well, in Slacker013's defense, this really is the only place to hold a conversation with me as I don't have any random posts between my chapters.
I am glad you think that I've managed to bring humanity and realism to the story despite it obviously being such a fictional account of the end of the world.
A haunting image this time eh? I suppose it could indeed be that. More chapters to come, with more pictures that I've collected for the sole purpose of putting into the story.
is it me or dose everything u write...well, i dunno. . . AWSOME!
Well thank you very much. I'm glad your enjoying. Others seem to agree with you as well.
stop sinning thats your new nickname sinning.cause u always sin.
My friends call me Sin... or Sinful.
Besides, some sins are fun...
Well, I admire your ability to write.
so how goes Number 11?
It don't go too bad. Getting a few ideas for it that kind of came out of now where.
Do you have a planned ending or are you writing as it goes?
Fallschirmfuchs
Awesome.
sinfulwolf
Thank you.