why make zombievampires?
I enjoy writing, and I enjoy sharing what I have with folks. I suppose that makes me an entertainer of sorts. I hope you can find something of mine that you enjoy and helps pass the time. Leave a comment, or not, the choice is yours.
Jackie
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because I could.
........awesome
Glad you enjoyed.
Jeez. I can't hold the story line for long. I usually get bored and can't finish a story and leave it incomplete. You ARE the excellent writer; I'm just a child putting sentences together compared to you...
Ah well. I don't claim to be a horrible writer, but I don't think I make you look childish. I am glad you like my writing though.
everything you write is deep and awsome, if this was 5/5 i'd give it a 10! <(^u^)>
lol. Well thank you very much good sir. I am glad you enjoy.
Well! I was gonna be disappointed... and then an INFECTED VAMPIRE shows up. Now that's crazy! And that's all I've got to say! So much to see in the world, so little time...
Fight scene was nice, with complimentary Metal Gear Solid tunes running through my head all the while. But some words were messed up (I'm sure you know which ones are screwy. Just give a second look). Still good as usual.
I only made the "disappointed," remark because I was hoping for a showdown between Haley and John. But he's busy finding out about himself and she's fighting her own personal demons. Alas. No doubt they'll clash soon. And, now, I actually think that Haley wouldn't stood a chance. At least not at this point. Sort of like, not till it was meant to happen. I'm sure that's your reason for holding out on me, if no one else. Like they say, "The best is yet to come!"
ARRRRRRRGH! Man, I wish John would move faster and find out about himself! It truthfully is starting to get to me, not knowing what his story is. At least, this is a premonition to juicier things. It's just the waiting that's killing me... (better than the zombies killing me I suooise. Lol)
And Joey's dead... that's a shame. Oh well. Shit happens.
All in all, yet another good installment. The tension for the next one is building up...
THAT PICTURE JUST MOVED!!!!!!! (scrolled down the page to avoid looking at it for too long)
DarkX.
Well I don't want the big boss man to either die, or kill the main characters just yet. This isn't a video game where folks can clash with shooting guns and swinging swords and the villain will jump away with not a scratch despite the fact you wailed on him like a hundred times. So if John and Haley had fought, someone would have been killed, and that kind of kills off later chapters. So not as much, "best is yet to come" but more, I want my villain (or my hero) alive to finish the story.
Glad you liked the fight scene. I'll have to look over it again though to check for some of them words that would be screwy.
As for John's background, people have been waiting so long I'm worried that it won't be good enough. I've kept his origins in the dark because I've heard that not knowing much of the villain makes him more interesting. Unfortunately all this build up to what he is may cause disappointment when he is finally revealed. I did leave some clues behind in this chapter though. You also didn't mention anything about Damien's note.
Yep, Joey's dead. It seems like you didn't like him very much.
Ah yes, the note. Well, it wasn't that I didn't notice it so much as I didn't attach gravity to it. Unless you pull another "John," on us (heh heh, see what I did there? :P) I'm sure we'll find out about it's contents next chapter.
Speaking of, if John's a worry to you, just spend more time on his story. You said you had plans on closing the series pretty soon, so it's not like you got forever to tell us about him. Not if you want to close the series properly, anyway. My advice to your fear of ruining his image is to make hist story as fucked up as possible. No, I don't mean make it crappy, I mean MAKE IT SOME SERIOUSLY CRAZY ASS, SCARY AS FUCK, MIND-BENDINGLY DEMENTED SHIT. I believe I speak for everyone when I say that the more fucked up they are, the more villains are loved/respected. And if you don't believe me, just look up Pyramid Head, perhaps the most fucked up, yet respected villain of all time. Now, I'm not telling you to model John after him, but rather, make him fucked up YOUR style. Plunge to your deepest depths of the horror you could ever possibly associate with psychos and sociopaths. Make him one crazy son of a bitch!
Just remember, that's my advice, not a necessary requirement. I just think that will help is all.
And as for Joey...Well I did like the humor he offered when he was alive. So, yeah, I'll miss him slightly. But only that much. I would of been a lot more torn if Lila or Jay died. I'm not worried about Haley and making John die this early would be stupid. And your smart. That won't happen, if it does...yet.
As for their inevitable encounter... that should be interesting.
That picture is STILL SCARING ME!!! CUT IT OUT!!!!
DarkX
Completely fucked up. I'll try, and see what comes out the other end, but like I said, I've already had him planned out since chapter 4, since before I introduced him. We shall see what occurs though.
Joey... yeah Joey was kind of my comic relief in a way. Not why he was killed though.
Lol. I'm almost happy that picture is getting to you. Means I chose well.
scary, but im a big boy, ill live. Its very good but i think its missing exclamation marks but thats not the point, its very imaginable and your series have always made me chill but i hope you will continue writing stories. Because they are great!
-star-
I'm not a fan of exclamation marks. I occasionally use them in dialogue to add emphasis on yelling, but not very often.
Glad you are enjoying, and glad you find some chills in my words. I will continue to be writing more after this one is done.
...mum?
perhaps.
damn I thought the solider would die before joey would and jay killed him. Man that's actually a disappointment. Oh well should of got out of the way.
You don't like the soldier?
Slaanesh... feels good man.
Indeed.
Hydrogen Peroxide... Feels good man.
I'll take yer word on that one.
all right, i got me some free time.
time to write, and stop playing Modern Warfare 2
Yeah... ye're falling behind.
ok, about 2/3 of the way done.
expect either tommorow or the day after.
Well, you've got yourself a deadline now.
Feels good man... feels good man.
So does an adrenaline rush.
well, very little done today, a friend of mine was kinda having a total meltdown.
i got about a half hour, lets see what i can do
A fair bit can get done in half an hour. Especially if the story "runs away on you".
wrapping up the chapter.
you mind if i steal your idea of a table of contents page?
not really.
to bad i already did
eh, just a way to organize is all it is.
Awesome story. Very good combination.
Thank you very much. I'm glad you like.
hey sin. Since you are such a great inspirator and writer i decided to make a test run of a potential series. Do you mind giving me some feedback?
Not at all. Please do realize though that I can be rather frank with feedback, as it's the best way to improve.
Fallschirmfuchs
Zombie vampire... very intresting... in a good way.
sinfulwolf
I've been waiting ten chapters to use the zombie vampire.