That was really awesome.
I rather liked the garlic arrow sequnce, that was pretty badass
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I'm glad you did, I thought that part was pretty cool myself.
Brrrr... that killing sequence gave me the chills. Frighteningly well written. And I gotta agree with Zero, that was a clever trick, having the arrow with garlic. Still really, REALLY scary. All while I'm reading it in the light of day no less!
You deserve some kudos for that awesome title. Not that you don't always have good names for your work, but this one was particularly rawesome. Have some kudos! *offers some kudos bars*
In reading the part where she gets ready for the hunt, I'm just a tad curious as to why you chose for her leather armor to be somewhat revealing. Did you do it for manuverability reasons only? Or was there anything else behind it (symbolism, heritage, a chance for some skin, etc.)? Just wondering.
The closing to this was also particularly good. That bastard Du Lac did it again...
What really makes him intimidating as a villain is that he does what does so simply and straight forwardly. As if he isn't attempting to hide what he does at all. I can't wait for him to fight someone in a drawn out clash.
Nice beautiful picture,
DarkX.
I am rather proud of that garlic arrow. I enjoyed thinking of how it would work while at the same time thinking of the ways that garlic will affect vampires in my little universe.
I thought the title fit. I occasionally occasionally have trouble coming up with chapter titles, but this one clicked.
Ah, the revealing armour. Her usual plate armour that she'll don later on is not revealing as its supposed to be efficient in proper combat. The leather scout gear she's wearing though is a bit of a nod to the film "King Arthur" where Kiera Knightly playing Guenevere donned a similar design. It's a throw back to the old Britons, to the older ways. Seeing as I didn't get very in depth with how revealing it was, no it wasn't for skin per se. She wears the light leather for maneuverability, and only wore her top to keep her breasts secure and preventing them from interfering with fighting.
Glad you enjoyed the end. I wanted to include a Muslim character from the get go to show different sides of the human conflict, as well as reinforce the villainous nature of Du Lac. Du Lac himself is a bastard, and most definitely a villain of the story, and he will have to clash directly soon.
Thank ye, glad you enjoy it.
More and MORE intense. keep this incredible work up my friend.
I shall indeed. More is coming. I can't just leave everyone hanging.
ahhhh writing how pathetic it was used. now instead of writing beatutiful novels they write horrible stories that aren't original.
Ahhh someone who declares emotion the bane of humanity yet revels in anger and depression. Sorry sweet cakes, but those are emotions, and ye are being hypocritical. Seeing as you don't enjoy my work, and have offered zero constructive criticism but just a rather pathetic attack, you can just piss off.
I'm curious and I want to know... do you plan for their to be a visible consequence for Du Lac's lack of discretion and full on forthrightedness for killing and amassing fellow undead? Obviously, some of the troops, both English and Muslim, are catching on that something's just not right about him. But other than that, is there anything else that could happen? Wouldn't his vampire peers wish for him to keep it more undercover than he's doing? Or is that going to be explained?
I love your work and eagerly await the next installment,
DarkX.
Well, all that is stuff I can't give away at this point.
Fair enough. I'm sure you will go over it.
I will indeed. I can't just go and leave people hanging now can I?
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issue repaired
you make me laugh at your stupid attemps to attack me and my beliefs.
And... what about your stupid attempts to attack everyone else?
nice another story.
Glad you enjoy.
hey where has everyone else gone?
I'm not sure. Elsewhere I would assume.
your the best at writing
Thank you for the compliment, but I'm not the best by far. There are plenty of better writers out there.
O der I think I'm a bit late =.=
I've only been lurking in the flash portal and occasional BBS D:
How's the story writing going?
awesome. to say the least
Glad you enjoyed it. I do try to entertain.
story wise great
Awesome! Glad you enjoy
Do you usually go out of your way to write separate stories for contests?
What's the topic for this contest?
gift for you on my post.
Hurray!
you gave me an ogry with that blood
What? That makes no sense. Did you mean orgasm?
katsparkles
well done chapter indeed :)
sinfulwolf
Glad you enjoyed dear.