I enjoy writing, and I enjoy sharing what I have with folks. I suppose that makes me an entertainer of sorts. I hope you can find something of mine that you enjoy and helps pass the time. Leave a comment, or not, the choice is yours.
Age 36, Female
Warrior
In a dark forest
Joined on 12/27/06
This story is going to incredible depths I never thought possible. I think the only thing that has yet to be done is covering Lancelot Du Lac and his past. But I'm willing to bet that that will be in due time.
I want to review this more thoroughly, but I don't have the time. I will get back to it. Bottom line, I enjoyed.
More later.
-General DarkX.
I am really trying to make the plot that much thicker as the story goes on. I think it makes it more interesting. Lancelot's past will eventually be unveiled, but that will take time, and perhaps not in one fell swing.
I look forward to your more in depth thoughts on the chapter, until then, enjoy yourself.
The more and more depth you add to Andrezj, the more and more surprised I get. Though, if what I've deduced from him is right, that his wife was the victim of a vampire attack, then I'm a little confused. Shouldn't he be a little more actively aggressive in fighting Vampires? I know he knows better, but I would have thought that he would hone close combat skills for the purpose of beating them himself. Then again, the wonderful thing about your works is that it could go either way. Maybe we just haven't seen that side of him. Or maybe he doesn't have that and that would make him much more original character. Andrezj has become a character who's level of intrigue is on par with Gwenhyfar, if not more so because he's not a clear cut protagonist. Either way, he has actually become one of my more favorite characters.
That's what most got my attention. The same mystery surrounds Gwen as always and what her actions lead to.
As for Alan and Karim, I'm sure you have a plan. But I would caution against dragging that scene on any longer. It's kind of starting to lose it's credibility. Either they need to get out by next chapter, or be killed. I'm not issuing an order, but I am stating that it's getting surreal, even for a fantasy story. They fought, fell and got injured and are still fighting. That's a testament to human persistence, but it's kind of much. I'm still ok with it now, just be sure you cut it off soon.
Otherwise, very well done once again. I'm glad I could review this in full and, when I can set aside more free time to do so, I will review your prompt work as well.
-General DarkX.
I'm glad you like Andrzej, indeed there's been another that's said he's quickly becoming their favorite over everyone else. As to his past, his fighting prowess and more... time will tell. I can't spill it all on him right now, can I? But I will over time, be sure of that.
Gwen still has her mystery, but much like Andrzej the mists will be pulled away over the course of the next few chapters.
I do have a plan for Alan and Karim, but seeing as this has been one of very very few pieces of feedback, and the only one that actually addressed that portion of this chapter, I'm going to have to reevaluate that plan based on the what you've said.
So until next time, take care, and enjoy yerself.
I just can not apologize enough for reviewing in late on this masterpiece of yours. Life has just been killing a pretty huge chunk of realy life.
This story is very long and drawn out, it's one of the many things I like about it, but viewing it on NG is a bit of a pain, I wish I had it in actual book form. It certainly deserves that kind of honor.
I like the dealing with spys and prostitutes and such, feels very appropiate to the age the story is in.
I like Alan and this just further proves his amazing skills of bieng an overall unkillable badass motherfucker
Flaming swords for the win!
Andrzej is becoming more and more of an interesting character and I've really grown to like him as well.
I really love all of your work and I still think it's one of the best things I've ever read.
It's fine, life comes first.
I am trying to make this a longer more complex story than what I've done in the past. While it might be easier to read I've always wanted my work to be freely available to the public.
Spies and prostitutes did indeed simply fit the time period, especially in Venice. Things can slip out easily during pillow talk, and many who wanted information knew this.
While my primary goal with Alan isn't to make him a bad ass, it certainly is turning out that way. Larger than life characters helps cement this as a fantasy tale despite being in a somewhat historical setting.
Andrzej is developing more and more as a character in my mind. He's rather different than what I originally meant for him to be and he brings a new side to the various conflicts brewing in Europe and the Middle East.
I'm glad you enjoy it so much, more will be coming.
Yoda643
Thats a long post! But I have to admit its pretty good!
sinfulwolf
It's part of a longer story, 25,000 words so far. But I'm glad you liked it.