Why does it seem like everyone I used to chat with is gone...
Anyway, you're still writing, right?
I enjoy writing, and I enjoy sharing what I have with folks. I suppose that makes me an entertainer of sorts. I hope you can find something of mine that you enjoy and helps pass the time. Leave a comment, or not, the choice is yours.
Jackie
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Not really... there's been no real motivation. I didn't even know you were still around.
I was at a computer, had been thinking about Newgrounds, and dropped by...
...and was aghast to see I had left NOTHING for this yet. >_< THAT CHANGES NOW
Your dialogues never cease to intrigue and feign reality. And this is no different. My favorite point is when the conflict truly erupts and the formerly calm Sergeant unloads on the prince. I really loved reading that part, you really captured the intensity in that moment really well. The build up was good too, and then ending was well done, but it felt mildly abrupt. In this scenario, it could work either ways, but it did feel sudden. Maybe that's just my personal preference, but it's something to consider.
Man, I miss reading your work and talking to you. You're awesome and I could use more of that. Send me a PM sometime?
-DarkX
Ha. Glad you enjoyed it. It was just a quick one shot in an attempt to get back into writing.
Are you still...active?
Ah... well I'm still around, just less interactive as I used to be
Ah. Well I'm hardly around these days.
Sucks that everyone's slowly drifting away...
OY LASS!
Hark! For I have delivered unto thee a message! Make haste and respond, I beseech ye!
Merry Christmas!
JJ JJ
What?
Deathcon7
I wish you would have given the prince a bit more dignity-- poor future monarch-- but you did well. There's a couple issues with clarify, where it seemed you were thinking quicker than you were typing, in those situations you just want to ensure you're mindful of what you're saying. This also reads as if you were too comfortable with the content. The fantasy genre certainly has its fill of impudent princes. In the future, for the sake of exercising, trying reversing rolls, doing something you're not quite, if at all, comfortable with.
sinfulwolf
While this isn't really a fantasy piece, your advice still applies. As these prompts are experiments, you are right, I should do things I'm not so comfortable with. I still have to keep an eye on situations where my fingers or mind runs faster than the other.
Thanks for the feed back.