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Blood of the Damned pt 3

Posted by sinfulwolf - October 11th, 2009


Well here it is. Part 3. Do hope you enjoy. The picture at the bottom is me blatantly stealing my character design for Haley from somewhere else. Bonus points for those who guess what the picture is. Regardless... enjoy chapter 3.

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Blood of the Damned
Part 3

The loud boom of the double barrelled shotgun echoed in the twilight air.

"Get off my lawn you undead fucks!" Phil O'Conner yelled as he broke his weapon's barrel.

Two of the undead were scuttling towards him, hissing. They ignored the fallen zombie, stepping over him and the brains splattered across the grass. Phil cursed, letting loose a stream of foul language as he slipped a shell into each of the chambers.

He thumbed the two hammers back into place as the creatures moved ever closer to his porch. Finger settled on the first trigger he fired, throwing one zombie away from his home. That same finger quickly fell back to the second trigger as the second zombie lurched up the steps, torn hands reaching for the lone farmer.

"fuck ya!" Phil yelled, and fired.

The zombie's skull was shattered, just as its body tumbled down the steps, splashing gore across the grass.

Phil let out a long breath, then reloaded his gun. He walked inside his home, closing the door behind him and locking it. He wandered into the kitchen and turned on his radio. He looked at the dial to make sure that it was still set to the local station. There had been nothing from the mainland for the past week, and everyone feared the United States had finally gone dark after the virus had struck a little over three years before.

Dark just like the United Kingdom had gone five years ago. No more life came out, and no one dared go in.

Phil sighed. There was nothing but static coming over the radio. The city must have fallen completely. No one knew how the virus had gotten here. But it first showed up about two weeks ago, and everything had slowly degenerated into what it was now.

Phil looked into his pantry, checking the food stocks. Enough to last him and his daughter for a few weeks. With his wife it would have been a shorter time... but she wasn't around any longer.

Phil choked back tears at the thought of what he had to do to her, of what she had almost done to their little girl. He let out a sigh and looked out the back window to where her grave was, the homemade cross like a beacon of loss.

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Joey slammed the door shut and let out a long breath before sliding down the concrete wall so he could rest.

"Those fuckers are fast... they were never that fast in the movies," he panted while the woman checked around for other entrances to the garage, ensuring they were safe for the moment.

"Some movies had fast zombies in it," she muttered absently as she pushed a bit on large garage door, checking its give.

"Shut up," Joey responded as he looked around.

He noted the work bench, and the tools laying all over and the oil spills on the ground. There was a car raised up so the mechanic could work on it. He thought about taking it for a minute before he realized the engine block had been removed for repairs.

"My name's Lila by the way," the woman said, walking over from checking the door that led into the office. She held out her hand.

Joey got to his feet and grasped it, shaking it heartily.

"Joey," he introduced, before walking over to the work bench.

He started going through the various tools, before pocketing a screwdriver and taking up a hefty wrench in his hands. He nodded, not as impressive as Lila's lead pipe, but it could work quite well.

"So... I say we get some rest here, then make a run out of the city," Lila suggested.

"Yeah. There's that gas station just outside city limits where we can grab some food and water and stuff. There's some farm houses before we get to the cottages we might be able to check out too," Joey said.

"Good idea. In the mean time we should get some water into us," Lila said, tossing a water bottle to her new companion.

"Where the hell did you get this?" Joey asked, just as he noticed the fridge behind Lila.

With a sigh he opened the water and started to drink it down. It was going to be a long night.

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Haley pulled on her leather jacket before adjusting the belt that went across her torso. She ran her fingertips over her sword, admiring the oriental design before sheathing it. Wiping the blood from her mouth Haley moved out of the bedroom of her meal and went downstairs.

Passing the two zombie corpses she walked outside, under the light of the moon. The wind gusted across her pale skin. In the distance the fires of the city illuminated the sky in an orange glow.

She hoped some of them had survived. Humanity was running out of places to hide from this damn virus, and if they went extinct, so would her kind. It was going to be a long bloody night.

Next Chapter

Blood of the Damned pt 3


Comments

awesome as ever, make me want to post all my new chapters.....good pic by the way, seems like you might be involving several of the worlds major countries...if at all possible make a Nazi Zombie referrence XD.
But serioulsly awesome.

We'll see about the Nazi Zombie reference. I doubt it, as it doesn't really fit... but we'll see. Glad you enjoyed.

good story

Glad you are enjoying in so far.

just a question, do all of the people met up at some point and kick major zombie ass?

We shall see won't we?

Once again, super fucking awesome.

Glad you are enjoying.

Wow, really exciting, my internets too slow so maybe sometime you could paste all the chpters to a text file and send them via email? my email is Kazukaro@hotmail.com Thnx love your story so far.

Yeah, I can do that for ya sometime.

First of all,I must say that I am quite impressed with this episode.I can see this story going a long way.Right now it's just setting the stage,but I can't wait until the action starts!It sure does make me excited to see your work.

Now,the complaints (i hate this part,but it is necessary).I must say,switching between al these characters is a tad confusing.It taxes my mind to remember these people.At least it's worth it.
Found a typo,but I'm glad it's less than last time.
Also,I found some verbs that didn't completely fit the text.

Also,I have a question.Do you think these characters will ever meet up?It would be interesting,but it wouldn't kill me if you kept it in individual stories.

But,even with it's few faults,I find tremendous potential in this.With vivid words and fascinating characters,I commend your progress.I hope you continue these episodes!

I will continue, and I do like the criticism. It is what help makes me better as a writer no?

Now as for the typos, I do try to get them all, and use spell check. Are you sure you're not seeing the differences between Canadian and American spelling?

However, I do believe these characters will meet up yes. Now I'm just worried about delivering a good enough ending.

amazing simply amazing please continue its so good it could be a book

Why thank you, but I'll keep putting it here so its free.

If your looking for an ending either have a nuclear explosion, have all the good guys die, or have it turn out to be a dream. yeah that would be sweet. But you should have written the final chapter first and then stow it away, i mean i did with Red Dawn, which i have now continued and am currenly on chapter 4.
just out of curiosity will there be any love interest between Joey and Haley, or Lila for that matter?

I do endings last, for while I may have a story plotted out in my mind, things can change when I go to write them. I mean, chapter 2 turned out completely different than I had intended. Because of this I do the ending last so it doesn't seem as tacked on when everything before it changes.

No comment on love interest though.

Wow, that was actually really good. I got bored again and read what you said so I decided to read it and I think that is the best story I have read in a while. Keep up the good work. Have you ever considered writing a book? I think you should.Also, did you draw that yourself? Its really good.Seriously, all you really need is to make the story longer and you could get it published.I would buy it. Anyways great story.

Well thank you very very much. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. As for writing a book, no I don't think I will. I'll just keep to writing free stuff on the internet.

The picture though I did not draw. I'm a horrible artist so I won't try to take credit for it. The picture is actually from the video game Wet, of the main character.

I'll let you know what chapter 4 comes out.

that means yes, now which one, which one, hahahaha

I meant no comment in that I'm not entirely sure of that myself either. Haley definitely not.

If there is going to be a romantic subplot I'm going to let it develop, instead of simply tacking it on where it'll be awkward and weird to read.

Hmmm,I guess the I was wrong on the typo.I thought when it got to the "fuck ya!" part,that "fuck" was to be capitalized,but I guess not.Anyways,I do know the difference between American and Canadian writing.Aren't words that end with "or" in American writing end with "our" in Canadian?Like "ardour",or harbour"?I think that's right.But it's not that important,anyways :)

oh... yeah the "fuck" should have been capitalized. Thanks for pointing that out.
As for the U.S./ Canuck writing that's pretty much correct.

Well i for one think there should espicialy with Haley, might mke things interresting.
But really therer should be one, it's a good plot device, i would know, i'm gonna have a huge love thing in my story, eventulaly.

It can be a good plot device, but like I said, I don't want it simply tacked on. It's got to develop naturally, otherwise it'll just be crappy. As none of these people are in relationships to start with, and they are all in a survivalist situation, it may not be top of their minds to get into a relationship.

Sweet!!! Great work! Oh, btw,to the Nazi zombie refrance, there are some small groups of them that gather in barns in the south (based on what I saw in a family guy episode, the one where Lois kills Stewie). Mabey that's how the Nazi zombie killing can come into play? Anyway, awsome job!

I doubt I'll have nazi zombies, like I said. Doesn't quite fit. This island isn't in the south.

I'm not a huge fan of fantasy stories, but I must say, you are one hell of a story writer.

Thank you very much. And I suppose this somewhat qualifies as a fantasy.

I'm bored, make a 4th one

Should come soon.

oiM scoming off thus picature!!K#J

That... makes no sense. Thank you?

Shut the hell up SassyCatMan!

Hey now. No need for that. I can take care of myself.

sorry he just been doing that to everyone, kinda pissed me off

Meh. Sometimes you just gotta let things go.

Hey - I don't think I've ever directly said thanks for all of those nice reviews -- so thanks!!! :)

I really do appreciate it. :3

Not a problem. I do really enjoy your work and would love to see more in the future!

It's good, definitely better than some of the retards in my creative writing course. You have a good flow when it comes to action and that's a rare talent for many writers.
Some of the diction you use is rather bland though, such as in the first section you say, " He looked at the dial to make sure that it was still set to the local station," looked is rather simple. It'd suggest something that could better place the characters mood rhetorically like, "He frantically scanned the dial to be sure..." or "He glanced at the dial exhausted, making sure..."
Also while the action flows well, some parts are so fast it becomes awkward and I become unfamiliar with the characters. Such as with Haley, when "She ran her fingertips over her sword, admiring the oriental design before sheathing it." You could go further if you bring up the oriental design, like say it reminded her of martial arts films she would watch and how she admired the stars like Bruce Lee or Uma Thurman. This would open us up more to your character and bring a unique sense, because how often do you find a vampire that admires Bruce Lee or astrives to be a kung fu star.

I'm glad you enjoyed, and thank you for the tips, I can always get better.
However in my defense, somethings I purposely make bland, because well... some times a bland action is just that.
However I agree that I could have done much more with Haley there, and I will keep that in mind for the next chapters. I have to bring her to the forefront more and make her a character. Not necessarily a liked character, but one that is interesting.
Thank you very much for your input.

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