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Blood of the Damned Part 4

Posted by sinfulwolf - October 22nd, 2009


Apologies for the late update. I've been pretty sick for the past week and its been distracting me a lot. However, I did manage to get this together, so I hope you all enjoy this latest installment.

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Blood of the Damned
Part 4

"Are you ready?" Lila asked; her hand on the door.

Joey nodded in response, and the door was flung open. A zombie stumbled inside, and before it even lunged for the two living human's Joe's wrench connected solidly with the creature's skull. As the undead creature collapsed to the ground Lila stepped outside, swinging her lead pipe at another of the infected.

"Through the alleys, they won't see us... hopefully," Joey called out above the noise of chaos that had claimed the city.

Screams and gunshots still echoed between the buildings. The undead have not taken over completely just yet. Joey knew that they both still had a chance if the living were still trying to desperately fend off these avatars of death.

Lila followed Joey through the alleys, moving around dumpsters and bags of garbage, keeping an eye behind them for any zombies that might decide to come up from behind.

A scream from above caught Joey' attention, his gaze sweeping up the walls of the buildings around him.

Someone was falling from the roof, a zombie desperately grabbing for him as they plummeted towards the concrete.

"Watch out!" Joey yelled, getting Lila to dive out of the way.

The zombie's head hit a fire escape ladder, and it slumped down to collapse on the edge of a dumpster, its neck broken. The man who had jumped collided without pause into the ground. Blood spurted from his body and the sound of crunching bones filled the air.

"Oh God," Lila said, moving closer to the man, while looking over at the zombie to ensure it was actually dead.

Joey knelt beside the stranger. The man's arms were snapped, the bones of the forearms piercing through the skin, the fingers of the left hand utterly mangled. A piece of bone jutted from his left leg, and his right foot was pointed in the wrong direction.

Joey forced himself to look away from the mess.

"H-help m-me," the man gasped weakly as blood flowed from between his lips.

Joey stood up and started walking down the alley. He couldn't do anything, he knew that. The man was as good as dead.

He heard bones snapping, and turned around to see Lila crouched over the man, his head grasped gently in her hands. She had just snapped his neck.

"We couldn't just leave him like that," she explained, standing up and fetching her lead pipe.

"No... you're right," Joey responded, though he tried to push the scene of what just happened from his mind.

The whir of a helicopter passing overhead caught both their attentions. Looking up once more they saw the military aircraft speeding over the city. Out of nowhere, a bright object with a tail of smoke soured towards the helicopter, crashing into its tail with an explosion.

"What the fuck was that?" Joey asked, looking up as the helicopter spun out of control, its tail missing. It drifted out past the city and into the wilderness.

"I don't know... but we have to watch our backs for humans now," Lila replied with a frown.

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The sound of metal breaking and folding over on itself filled Haley's ears. Her head turned towards to the north, where a forest had been pushed back by the sprawl of the city. Smoke drifted into the night sky, and the vampire warrior frowned.

Beneath the pale moonlight she ran across farmland, rushing through fields of slaughtered cattle and stumbling zombies. She wasted no attention on them, they were nothing at the moment.

As she moved through the foliage of the forest, somehow moving like a ghost, feet making hardly a sound as they pushed off fallen logs and rocks. Each step avoided the twigs and fallen leaves that were scattered across the ground.

Gunshots echoed between the oaks and maples of the forest. Slow and steady; the shooter was a professional and still calm. However, that wouldn't help against a horde.

Haley emerged into a clearing made by a crashed helicopter. Broken trees lay across the ground, some fallen over the twisted frame of the military chopper. Smoke poured out of the cockpit though there was no visual fire. A single soldier was sitting next to the aircraft, one hand holding an M4 carbine, whilst the other pulled a tourniquet tight around his leg.

A few zombies were stumbling out of the forest towards him, and he carefully took aim using either his arm or a nearby branch to steady his weapon.

As soon as Haley appeared, he fired a shot, the bullet tearing through her chest. Blood spurted from the wound and she instinctively ducked, biting her lower lip in pain.

"Hold your fucking fire, I'm not one of them," Haley yelled out to the soldier.

"Jesus. Are ya hurt badly?" he shouted back, firing another shot at a zombie, the bullet tearing into its brain.

Haley looked down at her chest, the bullet having missed the leather jacket, but putting a hole clean through her undershirt and into the top of her breast. She sighed as the bullet was pushed out of her body.

"No," she said. He must not have seen the blood spurt.

She didn't bother watching the muscles knit themselves back together, or the veins spread like spiderwebs back into place, or the skin stretch back over what would have been a mortal wound.

"Good," he shouted back, as Haley approached once more.

"Any more weapons in that chopper?" she asked as she knelt beside the soldier, pushing his hand away to tighten his tourniquet herself.

Something had cut his calf open pretty deep. The tourniquet would have helped but it still needed proper bandaging.

"Yeah, two M4s in the back, and everyone in there had a pistol," the soldier informed her.

"Cover me then," Haley said, climbing into the shattered helicopter.

She heard the soldier swear and start shooting at more of the undead that stumbled towards them from the darkness of the forest. She had to be quick, this place was still very close to the city, and the crash was like a flare to everything on the island, living or not.

She grabbed two pistols with their holsters and some extra magazines. She pulled the one M4 that hadn't been mangled by the crash from the cold and bloodless fingers of a decapitated soldier. The head was no where to be found, and his blood covered his entire body.

Haley ignored it, using her shirt to wipe it off the carbine before pulling magazines from the dead man's tactical vest. She didn't say any words to the dead men sprawled across the deck of the aircraft, but grabbed a first aid kit that had slid beneath one of the seats.

"We need to get out of here now," she told the soldier, quickly pulling some bandages from the kit. She glanced at the nametag emblazoned on his chest, reading Jaskiewicz in the digital camouflage writing.

"Yeah... well its going to be impossible for me to move through this shit," Jaskiewicz said, wincing as Haley tightened bandages over the gash on his calf, his blood running over her pale hands.

"I'm aware. I'll carry you," she said, finishing her impromptu first aid, before slapping a magazine in her stolen M4 and cocking the action.

"No offense... but look at you. You don't look like you could carry me alone, much less with all this gear on," Jaskiewicz told her bluntly.

Haley turned slightly and shot a zombie through the head. The back of its skull broke open and its brains sprayed across the foliage behind it. Without any more words she slipped an arm underneath the soldier's body, and hefted him over her shoulder.

"Holy fuck!" he shouted out, but Haley was already moving. She wasn't entire sure where though.

Somewhere better than here.

Next Chapter

Blood of the Damned  Part 4


Comments

will there be a part 5 because this is excellent

There will be indeed.

epic as always. like how Haley actually helped that guy rather than "eat i geuss the word for it would be.
will he be a major player in the story?
and where did you come up with "Jaskiewicz"?

can't wait for the 5th
and sorry to hear about your illness

Jaskiewicz is a Polish last name. Knew a guy named that. Everyone ended calling him Jay.

Sorry i didnt get commenting on part 3 i read trough all of them before i read this one... Loving the story so far.... oh yea and try sticking a brit in there.. everyone loves a cocky brit;) lol keep it coming..:)

Well... Haley's British.
Glad you are liking it in so far.

excellent writing, you are setting a very high standard for yourself. Have you though about contacting an animator to possibly bring life to your story?

No actually. And if anyone is interested I may write up a real quick prequel or some such for that. I'll keep in mind. After chapter five I'll have an intermission of sorts for News.

yeah that guys got a point^ have you considered an animator, i need to find a good one

i have not yet. But I keep my options open.

Hmm...must say, I'm quite impressed with this entry. It sure did keep my attention.

It sure is fascinating how each of the characters think, and how you distinguish that. For example, how Joe was just going to try to move on and forget about the fallen man, but Lila put him out of his misery.

Now, for criticism.
Found a typo, but then again, who doesn't make typos :)
I did find it strange how the soldier just let Haley take his stuff. Maybe he was just in the heat of the moment, but I would still be wary of looters.
Also, if he was looking at her when he shot (which he must have if he shot her), then why did he ask,"Are you hurt?" Just seemed a little odd.

I hope you keep making these! :)

Typos... yeah they still get through despite spellcheck and a quick overlook.
However, heat of the moment, and more concerned with survival is what had the soldier let Haley take his stuff. She had just put on a tourniquet.
As for the getting shot bit, he wouldn't have known if she was wearing armour or anything, and it was kind of instinctive questioning. It was also dark, maybe he didn't actually hit her.

However, they are things to keep in mind, perhaps make more clear, as I continue. I'm glad you are enjoying these in so far, and I do plan on continuing.

What can I say, great story, but I have one question. Were you watching "Blackhawk Down" when writing this?

I actually haven't seen that movie in a couple of years. However, I was thinking about it while writing the soldier sequence. I wanted to capture to feel that the movie portrayed. I still have to pick up the book some day...

What book would that be?

Black Hawk Down.
It was a book before it was a movie.

It's a better documentary than a book.

The movie wasn't a documentary though. They got facts wrong, while still capturing the feeling of warfare in 1993. Unless you are referring to something other than the movie directed by one Ridley Scott?

wait! back up for a minute! its a book?!?!

thats friggin awesome!!!

Yes, I can't remember the author right now, but it was a book that was more in depth than the movie was.

The real batlle itself was used through seens of the movie but that is not what I'm talking about. What I'm talking about is a program on History Channel that I think goes by the name of the "True Story of Blackhawk Down".

Hmm. Well I never saw that. History channel is usually pretty good though. However, I wouldn't knock the book just yet. I am going to be looking into it.

It's very rare for me to just read out of entertainment, often I need to be tied to a post before I comply but I really am enjoying this story. I'm becoming more drawn into to characters, I love the action and description and the flow is natural and comfortable.

A couple sentences that made me wince though:

"Oh God,' Lila said, moving closer to the man, while looking over at the zombie to ensure it was actually dead."
Either the word "while" or "looking", one of those words adds to much informality and breaks flow.

"He heard bones snapping, and turned around to see Lila crouched over the man, his head grasped gently in her hands. She had just snapped his neck."
I thought snapping his neck was anti-dramatic for the situation. I honestly laughed at that, just a sad moment of silence, then SNAP. I understand they need to ration ammo but the situation looked dire enough to spare a bullet... unless this woman with no background being able to properly sever a spinal column is a rhetoric tool, then I take back about the neck-snapping and tip my hat.

"As she moved through the foliage of the forest, somehow moving like a ghost,"
Too many movings.

I really do enjoy your writing greatly, and also great thanks for the private message informing me of the release date. I intend support this series until publication, which I will then purchase and read multiple times.

On a leaving note, I want to submit a fan request not with intentions of telling you how to write you story. I would like to see a character from a horde perspective, a sentient Zombie, capable of inner dialogue and conflict. He could serve as an alpha male to members of the mindless horde, adding a deeper structure and threat to the hordes than just see people, eat people. And in later chapters/parts, I would absolutely drool over the idea of an epic Vampire/Zombie dual.
If my request is rejected, I'll merely shrug it off and continue enjoying the story. It's nothing I take too seriously.

Thank you for your honest review. It always helps me improve. I am however glad that you are enjoying the story.

I have no defence against the first mistake you mentioned, nor the third. Those are things I will need to work upon.

As for the neck snapping, those two particular characters didn't actually have guns. I will go back and explain why she did what she did in the next chapter though.... or somewhere down the line.

As for publication. I doubt that's going to happen. I'll probably put this up on a few other websites, so this story is 100% free.

As for your request, the epic vampire/zombie duel I will probably do. The Alpha zombie I shall look into. You're right, it could be an interesting twist, and add more depth.

The documentary is done by the people that I think do "Shootout".

Interesting. I'll have to hunt it down somehow.

I don't have TV... so yeah.

oh yeah that would be sweet!

DX - weasel got a very good idea!

I shall indeed look into his ideas and see if they can fit into the weavings of this little tale.

THRILLER

ignore the last comment, i was on a Michel Jackson high

Ah I see.

.... awe-some! can't wait for part 5. you should see if someone could animate this!

Lol, so I've been told. But I am glad you are enjoying.

Yeah, well I guess that be a problem unless you found the documentary on DVD.

Indeed. Which is doubtful. Oh well.

If you got a chance, watch it.

Like I said. I will.

tese stories are intrging ever thought of writing a book? because i think u have great potential:D

Though about it, but at the same time, would rather just provide stuff for you folks online.

Glad you are enjoying the story though.

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